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原标题:雅思满分作文模板

中国人写的雅思作文有组织但说话不足地道;native speaker写的文章够地道,但不足雅思!

幼编特殊为行家找到了 一篇雅思9分作文,是一位钻研和教授雅思的 美国先生写的,供行家赏析参考。

作文题现在:Children who grow up in families which are short of money are better prepared to deal with the problems of adult life than children who are brought up by wealthy parents

Children who grow up in families which are short of money are better prepared to deal with the problems of adult life than children who are brought up by wealthy parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Some feel that the children of low income families are better equipped to deal with difficulties posed by the ‘real world’ when they grow up and they also believe the privileged children of wealthy families are less fit to deal with these difficulties . The implications and veracity of this argument seem self-evident, but in fact require closer examination. ( 58words )

点评:

1 1 ’ 模式,末了 1 句为主题句。此段的主题句稍微有点稀奇,它实在否定了前线所挑到的不悦目点,从而外达出了本身的不悦目点,此外还引出了下文。

稀奇是末了半句:but in fact require closer examination ,感觉是在抛砖引玉。

The popular wisdom is that children of poorer families learn early on the value of a buck, and are thus naturally better suited to stretching money when times get tough in adulthood. Inversely, the children of wealthy families, those born with a silver spoon in their mouths, are believed to be completely ignorant of the value of money, having had everything provided for them in their youth and oftentimes erroneously expecting the same situation in adulthood. They are believed to be prone to overspending and financial irresponsibility. This belief, though logical, overlooks one key point which is , of course, education. (100words)

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点评:

1 ’ 3 模式,第 1 句是主题句。

请仔细,从此段的内容来望,这是个让步段(即分析本身并不赞许的不悦目点)。固然 4 段论的作文的主体段是两面商议,但是幼编照样爱如许的写作,即主体段的不悦目点照样有偏重的,把让步段放在前线,末了 1 句话引出下一段,如许太甚地很自然,而暂时己的不悦目点也比较清晰!

The basis of this argument is , of course, knowing the value of money, and the idea that children of the poor know this, and those of the wealthy do not . Who though, is in a better position to teach their children the value of money; someone skilled in earning and keeping it, the wealthy parent, or someone who can not seem to acquire it,信息中心 the poor parent? Both wealthy and poor children are equally likely to acquire an education in money, whether it is formal, or in the school of hard knocks. Conversely, both children are as likely to ignore this education. (101words)

点评:

这段的内容感觉写得不足直接,照样在分析对方不悦目点的漏洞! 请仔细,前线让步段已经这么写过了,那么这一段最益是正面地论证本身的不悦目点,如许从内容上来说更 convincing 一点!

此外,必要表明的是,行家发现作者的内容照样有必定深度,但是这是要有必定的英语功底才走的!倘若英语功底不走的话,提出内容不要写太深,由于那样容易造成考官望不懂你在说什么!

A poor child may believe that one can get along, if not as easily, without wealth. A wealthy child may be well trained by a parent steeped in the knowledge of money management; the key to developing this skill is education.

点评:

末了一段有点像是挑出解决这个题目的手段,即 education。它异国像传统的末了段那样浅易的重申本身的不悦目点。

全文的不悦目点有待揣摩,作者很清晰是不赞许题主意说法,但是作者本身是更方向穷人家的孩子呢,照样富人家的孩子呢?按照文章来望,作者是中立,他所望重的是他们所批准的哺育。

In other words,整篇文章又是一次中立的写法。在雅思考试中,这栽写法频繁行使,照样特殊实用的,行家能够学习一下。

此外,文章中有许众益词益句,稀奇是长句,值得 背诵模仿并借鉴到本身的雅思写作中。

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